My learning experience is that in every exam that I take, I
should give my best even after knowing that I have secured a place for myself. Because
I don’t know when I may need that exam result that I took.
In year 2008, I took my ‘O’ level exam lightly knowing that
I have already secured a place in Polytechnic through Direct Poly Admission
(DPA). One of the criteria was that I had to obtain a L1R4 score of not more
than 26 points for my ‘O’ level examination. This criteria seems easy to be
achieved. Hence, I did not put in as much time and effort as I had when I
revised for my prelims. When the results came out, I was shocked to see that I
failed my Combined Humanities and I was so worried that I could not get into my
desired course in the Polytechnic. After checking with MOE, I realized that on
top of the 4 compulsory subjects, another subject that would be taken into
account would be either Add Maths or Combined Humanities. I felt a great sigh
of relieved after hearing this and I made a promise to myself that I would work
hard in Polytechnic so that I do not have to go through this kind of similar
torture again when I further my studies in University.
After I completed my studies in Polytechnic, I obtained a
diploma with Merit. However, I felt that this Merit does not serves its purpose
because I could not get into my desired course in the local University. I guess
it was because my ‘O’ level results pulled me down. Once again, this experience
taught me that I should give my best in every exam that I take and not to be
too over-confident of myself.
After waiting for one year, I tried to apply for
other courses and here I am, I managed to get into NUS, Project &
Facilities Management. Getting into NUS was not an easy journey for me. I will
cherish this opportunity that I have to be able to study in NUS and I will give
my 110% effort into every module that I take. I hope that I will be able to go
for Student Exchange Programme (SEP) and my ultimate goal is to obtain 1st
class Honours after I completed my four years study in NUS.
"Because I don’t know........" : avoid sentence starting with because
ReplyDeleteYou were correct! Good job!
DeleteFor the second paragraph, you may want to use "When the results were released.." instead of "When the result came out...".
ReplyDeleteFor the third paragraph, you should use "does not serve" instead of "serves".
All the best in achieving your goals! :D
Nil Sine Labore.
May I suggest that for "This criteria seems easy to be achieved." to be changed to "This criteria seems easy to achieve." instead.
ReplyDeleteBe careful--criteria is a plural noun. It should be 'There criteria seem...'
Delete(Missing article) In the year... ...in the university...
ReplyDelete(SVA)....Merit does not serve its...
(Missing relative clause)...results that pulled...
(Con&T) After waiting for a year, I tried to apply for other courses. As a result, I managed to get into...
Cheers :)
Blogging buddies: I am very impressed with the comments you made on the grammatical errors--Very well spotted indeed!
ReplyDeleteContent and organisation: This is a very good reflection. I enjoyed reading your work. You reflective writing truly reflected upon your change in attitude. You also recognised what you need to do in future to achieve your goals.
ReplyDeleteOrganisation: A very coherence piece of writing indeed. You first described the cause of your carefree attitude, noted the risk of being too carefree in your studies, and then reflected upon how and what you did to change. Good job!
Language: there are no major problems with your writing. I believe you can improve your writing by being more careful.
In addition to the problems your blogging buddies pointed out, please note the following:
1. Be careful using shortened spelling. You should not do this in academic writing ; e.g., prelims.
2. Effort is an uncountable noun.
3. Use of preposition: Think about the use of 'at' and 'in' in the sentence:
l cherish this opportunity that I have to be able to study in NUS.
4. Think about the use of comma to connect these two ideas together:
...I tried to apply for other courses and here I am, I managed to get into NUS, Project & Facilities Management.
5. Think about the use of past tense 'completed' in: YOu said 'I hope...' for the future...correct?
I hope that I will be able to go for Student Exchange Programme (SEP) and my ultimate goal is to obtain 1st class Honours after I completed my four years study in NUS.